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mr_fear






PostPosted: 23 Jan 2006 18:56    Post subject: Constructive Criticism Reply with quote

hay people new song i wrote wanna know what ya think about the lyrics

Its over

[Song Is Slow, Just Talking 2 people face to face]

Man: I Wanna Hear You Say It!

Woman: I'm Sorry, I Can't!

Man: Why?

Woman: I Just Don't Feel That
Way... not any more. We Don't Even Know
Each Other That Well

Man: But, I know I Love You

Woman: I know you do, but i

Man: So this is it!?! I Guess Now Theres
No Reason For Our Friendship, Now Is There !

Woman: You Don't Mean That!

Man: yeah I do Our Friendship... IT'S OVER!

[Song Becomes Faster]

Verse One:

Why I Never Saw This Coming
I Guess I Was Blindsided By Love
I Should Have Taken Things Slower
Tearing Us Apart

I Guess You Were Right
Our Friendship Was The
Strongest Bond We Had

And Now The Only Thing I'm
Thinking About Is Having You Back
(having you back)

Chorus:

It's Tearing Me Apart
Knowing That Your With
Someone Else
It's Tearing Me Apart
Knowing That You Care
About Me
It's Tearing Me Apart not
Knowing what your doing now

Verse Two:

I Guess I Was Selfish
I Don't Deserve To Have You
(you deserve better)
But Let Me make One Thing Clear
I Will Love You Better

.[Guitar Solo].

Chorus:

It's Tearing Me Apart
Knowing That Your With
Someone Else
It's Tearing Me Apart
Knowing That You Care
About Me
It's Tearing Me Apart not
Knowing what your doing now

Verse three:

Why I Never Saw This Coming
I Guess I Was Blindsided By Love
I Should Have Taken Things Slower
Tearing Us Apart

I Guess You Were Right
Our Friendship Was The
Strongest Bond We Had

And Now The Only Thing I'm
Thinking About Is Having You Back
(having you back)

Chorus:

It's Tearing Me Apart
Knowing That Your With
Someone Else
It's Tearing Me Apart
Knowing That You Care
About Me
It's Tearing Me Apart not
Knowing what your doing now

[Song Slowes down back to Just 2 people Talking on the phone]

Man: I Wanna Hear You Say It!

Woman: I'm Sorry, I Can't!

Man: Why?

Woman: I Just Don't Feel That
Way... not anymore. We Don't Even Know
Each Other That Well

Man: But, I know I Love You

Woman: I know you do

Man: So this is it? I Guess Now Theres
No Reason For Our Friendship, Now Is There !

Woman: You Don't Mean That!

Man: yeah I do Our Friendship... IT'S OVER!

[Song fades out]

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weebo






PostPosted: 24 Jan 2006 17:24    Post subject: Constructive Criticism Reply with quote

no offense man but it sounds like stuff EMO kidz listen to...

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mr_fear






PostPosted: 25 Jan 2006 07:45    Post subject: Re: Constructive Criticism Reply with quote

ehh...no offence taken...
it was my first shot a writing a slow power balled sort of song see the thing is to get a
gig (at a public place)in this shit hole town you gotta have
a band that sing...
A.COVER SONGS (WICH SUCKS... BIG TIME)
or
B.SLOW MELODIC I WANT DONT LEAVE PLEASE I LOVE YOU HUGGY KISSY CRAP
(wich personaly makes me wanna hurl every time i try to sing it)

... this town really does suck i mean it if any-one on this board is planning a holiday
avoid toowoomba like the fucking plague

p.s i had a really shit night at work thus the dissing of the town an all

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LadySophia






PostPosted: 26 Jan 2006 06:06    Post subject: Re: Constructive Criticism Reply with quote

Dude....try living in Merced, and you'll think twice about not liking the city life...lol
Population: 70,000.....55,000 of them are snobby, ignorant assholes, and the rest don't
speak English.......it's really sad, plus, we live in the middle of the desert, we have
the worst air quality in the nation, and there's nothing to do here....AND even more so,
the alternative scene sucks bigtime....I'll stop there, otherwise this'll fill up a whole
page...

I swear I'm moving to Toronto, Canada or Blackpool, England as soon as I'm 18...

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weebo






PostPosted: 26 Jan 2006 07:55    Post subject: Re: Constructive Criticism Reply with quote

heh if you guys think you have it bad trying livieng in Hobart, Tasmania

capital city of thsi state (hobart) takes roughly 15 minutes to walk from one side of it
to another.
its a tourist area too because we have lots of tree's and old sandstone buildings and
ruins

but the funny thing is... 90% of the pictures travel places show of "hobart" is actuly not
of hobart... their normaly of sandybay (which is next to hobart.. but its actuly the area
where all the snobby and uni students live)

heh.. salamaca (or as some people call it "smellywanker")
http://travel.discovery.com/destinations/australia/photogallery/gallery/hobart.jpg

sandy bay:
http://www.grandpoohbah.net/Grandpoohbah/images/hobart.jpg

hence why in march im moveinnnnnnngggggg yaaaaaaaaaaaaaay ^.^'


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weebo






PostPosted: 26 Jan 2006 17:00    Post subject: Constructive Criticism Reply with quote

nah hobarts honestly a shit hole... you wont find any pic's oh actul hobart itself all the
pics are of sandybay or salamanca... (salamanca = tourist shit hole during the day and at
night trendy night club muchness)

but honestly it does take about 15 minutes to walk form one end of our capital city to the
other end o.O

if you like nature, seafood, and stinky ferals than i guess its an o.k. place

but i 100% purely revoltingly hate nature.
seafoods fun to play with but i only eat flake icon_sad.gif (lol once stuck a live crayfish on a
freinds face while he was sleeping and it latched on... even better the day befor we
watched the Aliens series)

adn yeah.. i hate ferals.. i actuly god called rude yesterday by one..

Feral scumbag: would you like to sign our blah blah blah to save blah blah blah tasmanian
forests.
me: lol not fuckin likely
Feral scumbag: your a rude prick arnt you...

if it wasnt female i would have span around and punched its face in...

this is how bad they are one side of a block right?... 8 of them asking for you to sign
some shit to save some even greater shit. each one will attempt to stop you and get you to
help their "cause"

there are countless protests through town ever year.

it doesnt matter if you sign up and give them money and stuff they still bug you for even
more money.

a friend of mine attempted to see if haveing "PISS OFF" in big capital letters on his
t-shirt would stop them form bugging him when he walked along a street in hobart.. 5 out
of 6 asked him to sign something -_-'

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purplenewrocks






PostPosted: 27 Jan 2006 02:03    Post subject: Re: Constructive Criticism Reply with quote

Just, well, no.
Sorry.

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LadySophia






PostPosted: 27 Jan 2006 08:15    Post subject: Re: Constructive Criticism Reply with quote

Hhmmhh....sounds like a good offer to me. ^.^ What "county" do you live in?

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LadySophia






PostPosted: 28 Jan 2006 05:44    Post subject: Re: Constructive Criticism Reply with quote

By county I mean what shire or whatever...but hey, you don't have to say if that's not
comfortable for you......*looks friendly*

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